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Yes, because everyone needs a good comunity .
and it is not healthy for people living in air polluted dirty place.
we can't live in a dirty polluted towns.
Every one must have a healthy city clean, not polluted city.
If we want this wee need to clean up.
it is not okay to trow rubbish into streets where pepole walk on.
we don't have to hunt animals .
earth is a big community that peapole and other animal live togeather.
we need to think about them to.
for the earth and us we need to use less plastic or things that make us or the earth sick.
pollution cause problems no matter what we need to keep the earth clean and make no pollution for all kinds.
we don't have to be earth dystryers we could be earth savers.
by little things to big we could do any thing like do not throw plastic or rubbishes on the grownd putit in the rubbish bin for the animals that live here.
every one is specal , do not pollute earth🌱

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Well said, Yu Ri! I am so happy with your answer. I also believe that we are the solution of this environmental problem. Anyway, don't forget to capitalize the first letter of a sentence. Take care!-Faith-
Yes, because everyone needs a good comunity .
>> Yes, because everyone needs a good community.
and it is not healthy for people living in air polluted dirty place.
>> And it is not healthy for people to live in a place with air pollution.
we can't live in a dirty polluted towns.
>> We can't live in a dirty and polluted town.
Every one must have a healthy city clean, not polluted city.
>> Every one must have a healthy and clean city, not a polluted one.
If we want this wee need to clean up.
>> If we want this, we need to clean up.
it is not okay to trow rubbish into streets where pepole walk on.
>> It is not okay to throw rubbish into streets where people walk on.
we don't have to hunt animals .
>> We don't have to hunt animals.
earth is a big community that peapole and other animal live togeather.
>> Earth is a big community that people and other animals live together.
we need to think about them to.
>> That's why we need to think about them too.
for the earth and us we need to use less plastic or things that make us or the earth sick.
>> For the Earth and us we need to use less plastic or things that make us or the Earth sick.
pollution cause problems no matter what we need to keep the earth clean and make no pollution for all kinds.
>> Pollution causes problems so we need to keep the Earth clean and make no pollution in every possible way.
we don't have to be earth dystryers we could be earth savers.
>> We don't have to be Earth destroyers, we could be Earth savers.
by little things to big we could do any thing like do not throw plastic or rubbishes on the grownd 
>> From little to big things, we could do anything like, we should not throw plastic or rubbish on the ground.
putit in the rubbish bin for the animals that live here.
 >> We should put it in the rubbish bin for the animals that live here.
every one is specal , do not pollute earth🌱
>> Every one is special, so do not pollute the Earth.
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