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I will explain what is my favorite food and why
My favorite food is plum.
That is because the plum color is so beautiful.
Second, The plum is very soft.
Third, the plum is delicious more than all fruits
Finally, the plum's seed is very small and I can eat many part.

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I will explain what is my favorite food and why
>> I will explain what my favorite food is and why I like it.

My favorite food is plum.
>> This is a good sentence!


That is because the plum color is so beautiful.
>> That is because the plum's color is so beautiful.
OR 
>> That is because its color is so beautiful.


Second, The plum is very soft.
>> Second, the plum is very soft.
OR
>> Second, it is very soft.


Third, the plum is delicious more than all fruits
>> Third, the plum is  the most delicious among all fruits.
OR
>> Third, it is the most delicious among all fruits.


Finally, the plum's seed is very small and I can eat many part.
>> Finally, the plum's seed is very small, so I can eat every part of the fruit.
OR
>> Finally, its seed is very small, so I can eat every part of the fruit.


Wow! You shared a lot about your favorite food, Joey! Amazing! Keep up the good job! 

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