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I\'m more comfortable about boys.

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I don't know because my type is to get along well with both men and women, but I think boys are a little more comfortable when playing. If there is something sad or frustrating that I want to tell someone, it is better to go to boys. Girls are interested in popularity or study. They think, "What's other people's hearts doesn't matter to me". I showed my inner feelings recklessly, but the girl think, "I thought she was good at mental care, because she is good at study, but... not so much?" The bottom line is that if she is woman, whether you're a close friend or not, you always need to be careful. But boys are more bubbly than I thought, and they don't have the complicated minds of these girls. If girl are good at studying, boys are good at sports, so boys have a faster brain, and boys are more comfortable playing because they are usually simple in nature. Still, when I can talk and approach without hesitation, I sometimes play with girls. Because friends are all precious~^^

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Maria!

Why do I agree with you so much?! When I was young, I also thought the same as you did. Girls tend to talk a lot about their emotions while boys like to play the game. I think I may have trained myself to be one of the boys so I am happier than some of the girls around me. I think that you also know this. So, to be happier when playing and just enjoying time with your classmates, avoid drama and just play!

Thank you for this well-written essay! Stay on top of your game all the time!

-T. Donna =)

I don't know because my type is to get along well with both men and women, but I think boys are a little more comfortable when playing. 
>> Correct!

If there is something sad or frustrating that I want to tell someone, it is better to go to boys. 
>> Correct!

Girls are interested in popularity or study. 
>> Correct!

They think, "What's other people's hearts doesn't matter to me". 
>> They think, "What's in other people's hearts doesn't matter to me". 

I showed my inner feelings recklessly, but the girl think, "I thought she was good at mental care, because she is good at study, but... not so much?" 
>> I showed my inner feelings recklessly, but the girls think, "I thought she was good at mental care, because she is good at studying, but... not so much?" 

The bottom line is that if she is woman, whether you're a close friend or not, you always need to be careful. 
>> The bottom line is that if she is a woman, whether you're a close friend or not, you will always need to be careful. 

But boys are more bubbly than I thought, and they don't have the complicated minds of these girls. 
>> Correct!

If girl are good at studying, boys are good at sports, so boys have a faster brain, and boys are more comfortable playing because they are usually simple in nature.
>> Correct!

Still, when I can talk and approach without hesitation, I sometimes play with girls. Because friends are all precious~^^
>> Correct!
Or: Still, when I can talk and approach without hesitation, I sometimes play with girls because friends are all precious.
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