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If for the first time, you would experience a racial discrimination, how do you think would you resp

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Whenever I hear any offensive words, I try not to react emotionally. To be reasonable at all time is impossible, however, since enraged emotion usually triggers mistakes, I always try hard to be calm and think one more time before acting. If I experience a racial discrimination, I think I will first try to ignore it. I believe that what racists intended is to offend my mind. So I would try to be calm and not to react to any discrimination. This might show them that such racial discrimination you made are ineffective to me. If the racial discrimination seriously interrupt me, I would try to talk with the racists about the problem. If the racists just talk irrational and incoherent words to offend me, I would give up to talk with them, and ask for help to someone like police, who can restrain them.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi there again Vicky!

The speed of your composition answer is just amazing! I think you can join an essay writing contest and nail it.^^

Anyway, racism is like a mind game. For as long as they do not physically hurt you, you can choose to ignore them. However in the case where they attack you physically, make sure you know how to defend yourself and know how to call the authorities.

Still, I hope that there would never be an instance wherein you experience racism. Let us aim for world peace!

Thanks again for this speedy response.

-T. Donna =)

Whenever I hear any offensive words, I try not to react emotionally. 
>> Correct!

To be reasonable at all time is impossible, however, since enraged emotion usually triggers mistakes, I always try hard to be calm and think one more time before acting. 
>> Correct!

If I experience a racial discrimination, I think I will first try to ignore it. 
>> Correct!

I believe that what racists intended is to offend my mind. 
>> I believe that what racists intend is to offend my mind. 

So I would try to be calm and not to react to any discrimination. 
>> Correct!

This might show them that such racial discrimination you made are ineffective to me. 
>> This might show them that such racial discrimination they made are ineffective to me. 

If the racial discrimination seriously interrupt me, I would try to talk with the racists about the problem. 
>> If the racial discrimination seriously interrupts me, I would try to talk with the racists about the problem. 

If the racists just talk irrational and incoherent words to offend me, I would give up to talk with them, and ask for help to someone like police, who can restrain them.
>> Correct!
Or: ...the police to restrain them.
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