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Female students in our class do better!

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In our class, female students are much more likely to participate in class than male students. Among the male student, there are many students who do well when they go to middle school. There are very few boys in my class who are good except for one or two. When I was in the first year of middle school, most of my class have no interest in studying except me and one girl, but when I got to the second year of middle school, the ranks were divided among the girls. I'm in the upper-intermediate level, and I haven't been able to get first place in my school yet. Among the girls in my class, there are about 5 students, including myself, are very interested in studying, participate in classes, and work tirelessly to get a recognition and attention. In conclusion, female student in our class do better~^^

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Hello there again Maria!

This is what we call "girl power"! Nowadays, boys and girls or ladies and gentlemen have equal opportunities to study and grow with their chosen careers. I am sure that you will be very successful someday because you have a discipline like no other. Working tirelessly is rewarded. So, thanks for doing so well in class and here on the composition page. 

I will see you in class tomorrow.

-T. Donna =) 

In our class, female students are much more likely to participate in class than male students. 
>> Correct!

Among the male student, there are many students who do well when they go to middle school. 
>> Among the male students, there are many students who do well when they go to middle school. 

There are very few boys in my class who are good except for one or two. 
>> There are a very few boys in my class who are good except for one or two. 

When I was in the first year of middle school, most of my class have no interest in studying except me and one girl, but when I got to the second year of middle school, the ranks were divided among the girls. 
>> When I was in the first year of middle school, most of the students in my class have no interest in studying except me and one girl, but when I got to the second year of middle school, the ranks were divided among the girls. 

I'm in the upper-intermediate level, and I haven't been able to get first place in my school yet. 
>> Correct!

Among the girls in my class, there are about 5 students, including myself, are very interested in studying, participate in classes, and work tirelessly to get a recognition and attention. 
>> Among the girls in my class, there are about 5 students, including myself who are very interested in studying, participating in classes, and working tirelessly to get a recognition and attention. 

In conclusion, female student in our class do better~^^
>> In conclusion, female students in our class do better.
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