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What is your idea of a perfect vacation? / What exotic foods do you want to try and why?

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I think a perfect vacation is just taking a rest. So I can watch Netflix, play golf, and hang out with my friends. But I should improve my knowledges, therefore I have to study at least 4hours per day.

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I want to try a scorpionida candy. It is a candy that has scorpionida in it. I think it is very unique, so I want to eat someday.

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Hi Yun! ^^

Perfect vacation is from where you get energy to burn fuel after coming back, from where you have memories to cherish later when you are down, from where you can get to do what you like with no time limit. Good choice! :)

When we travel to different places, we can encounter different kinds of food. Some can also be exotic. It's sometimes nice to try new things. You can gain more experience through this. You choice is really nice by the way. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I want to try a scorpionida candy. 
>> I want to try Scorpion Ida candy. 

It is a candy that has scorpionida in it. 
>> It is a candy that has scorpion Ida in it. 

I think it is very unique, so I want to eat someday.
>> I think it is very unique, so I want to eat it someday.



I think a perfect vacation is just taking a rest. 
>> CORRECT

So I can watch Netflix, play golf, and hang out with my friends. 
>> So, I will watch on Netflix, play golf, and hang out with my friends. 

But I should improve my knowledges, therefore I have to study at least 4hours per day.
>> But I should improve my knowledge, therefore I have to study at least 4hours a day.

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