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If I move to another country, I'd miss my home because I spent so much time at my home, and I also helped when our home was still building. So, I would be miss about my home if I move to another country.

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Hi Kane! ^^

Everything changes once you take off and start somewhere new. When you first land, it¡¯s normal to feel anxious, scared, maybe even a little sick to your stomach, and excited. Then you blink and months fly by as your feet get firmly planted in your new surroundings. Every day your life starts slowly piecing itself together like the stills of a stop-motion movie. 

On the other hand, there are things that we find annoying about our hometown. Everything is not perfect. It would still have flaws and needs changes. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I move to another country, I'd miss my home because I spent so much time at my home, and I also helped when our home was still building. 
>> If I move to another country, I'd miss my home because I spend so much time in it. I also helped during the construction of our house so it means a lot to me. 

So, I would be miss about my home if I move to another country.
>> So, I would miss my home if I moved into a different country. 

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