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Q:How do you think face-to-face communication differs from communication using computers?
A:Face-to-face communication don't need to wait for few second for the answer, but communication using computers need to wait for few second to listen other persons' answer.
Also, if the weather is not good, and a person that I'm talking to is at very far a way from me, then there will be a lot of racks.
Lastly, if it's communication using, computers, then people need to pay some money because, people use electricity when they communicate with computers.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Face-to-face communication don't need to wait for few second for the answer, but communication using computers need to wait for few second to listen other persons' answer.

>> In a face-to-face communication, you don't need to wait for a few seconds for the answer, but with communication using computers, you need to wait for a few seconds to listen to another person's answer.
Also, if the weather is not good, and a person that I'm talking to is at very far a way from me, then there will be a lot of racks.

>> Also, if the weather is not good and a person that I'm talking to is in a very far away place from me, then there will be a lot of interruptions.
Lastly, if it's communication using, computers, then people need to pay some money because, people use electricity when they communicate with computers.

>> Lastly, people need to pay in communicating through computers because people use electricity and internet when they use computers.

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