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If you moved to another country, what things would you miss about where you live now? Which ones wou

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If I moved to another country, I think I will miss about my country's foods and my country's environments.
I have a feeling that my country is my home so I didn't want to move to another country actually.
I don't know the exact reason but I think because I adapted to those environments and those foods.
So if I monved to another country, I think I will miss about my country's foods and my country's environments.
And also I will miss my school friends and I will miss my family too.

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Hi John! ^^

Everything changes once you take off and start somewhere new. When you first land, it¡¯s normal to feel anxious, scared, maybe even a little sick to your stomach, and excited. Then you blink and months fly by as your feet get firmly planted in your new surroundings. Every day your life starts slowly piecing itself together like the stills of a stop-motion movie. 

On the other hand, there are things that we find annoying about our hometown. Everything is not perfect. It would still have flaws and needs changes. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I moved to another country, I think I will miss about my country's foods and my country's environments.
>> If I moved to another country, I think I will miss my country's food and  environment.

I have a feeling that my country is my home so I didn't want to move to another country actually.
>> My country is my home so  I don't want to move to another country actually.

I don't know the exact reason but I think because I adapted to those environments and those foods.
>> I don't know the exact reason but I think it's because I adapted the food and environment here. 

So if I monved to another country, I think I will miss about my country's foods and my country's environments.
>> So if I moved, I think I would miss those. 

And also I will miss my school friends and I will miss my family too.
>> I will also miss my family and my  friends in school.
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