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Fashion makes people attractive! Because anyway, people look at clothes as the first impression. So I think fashion accounts for 50% of people's impression. But if fashion is so good, but a person's personality isn't good enough, it looks like unattractive at all. I'm in agree of fashion making people look attractive, but I think we should get rid of the stereotype that thinks that's all. If a person want to look attractive, if you do your best not only in fashion, than it will truly attractive. Just because they wearing expensive clothes doesn't mean that people's worth it. As the saying goes, don't judge a person based on appearance alone, clothes aren't everything ^^

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Hello there Maria!

I agree one hundred percent to your answer. People should wear clothes and not the other way around. After all, clothes were made for our safety and comfort. If other people want to see us just dressed up nicely then  their intention to know of we are good people is gone.

Anyway, I saw that your schedule will be removed from mine. I hope that you study harder and speak really well with your next teacher. 

I will miss you. 

See you again next time!

-T. Donna =)

Fashion makes people attractive! 
>> Correct!

Because anyway, people look at clothes as the first impression. 
>> Because anyway, people look at clothes for their first impression. 

So I think fashion accounts for 50% of people's impression. 
>> Correct!

But if fashion is so good, but a person's personality isn't good enough, it looks like unattractive at all. 
>> Correct!

I'm in agree of fashion making people look attractive, but I think we should get rid of the stereotype that thinks that's all. 
>>  I agree that fashion makes people look attractive, but I think we should get rid of the stereotype that thinks that's all. 

If a person want to look attractive, if you do your best not only in fashion, than it will truly attractive. 
>> 
If a person wants to look attractive, if you do your best not only in fashion, then you will truly be attractive. 

Just because they wearing expensive clothes doesn't mean that people's worth it. 
>> Just because they wear expensive clothes doesn't mean that the people are worth it. 

As the saying goes, don't judge a person based on appearance alone, clothes aren't everything ^^
>> Correct!
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