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What festivals do you have in your city? Can you explain what happens during those occasions?

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There is a book festival in my citiy.
I read a book at the book festival.

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Hi Emma! ^^

Festivals are an expressive way to celebrate glorious heritage, culture and traditions.  They are meant to rejoice special moments and emotions in our lives with our loved ones.  They play an important role to add structure to our social lives, and connect us with our families and backgrounds. They give us a distraction from our day to day, exhausting routine of life, and give us some inspiration to remember the important things and moments in life.  Festivals were started to pass the legends, knowledge and traditions onto the next generation.

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There is a book festival in my citiy.
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