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What were your best and worst trips?

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My best trip was jeju with my best friend!
The weather was bad and we didn¡¯t have a car either. It was hard but that hard things made us more fun. Also the food i ate in jeju, was so good
My worst trip was in vietnam. When i took off the plane, hothothot air came to me and i was shoked. I walk to temple in very humid and hot weather. Me and my family was all got sweated and irritated. Beach and swimingpool was so fun but i hate that weather. So my worst trip was vietnam with family!

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Happy Monday Su Bin! Finally! Thank you for diligently doing your homework. Remember, writing is also a way of expressing yourself. I hope that you will find the "fun" in writing English. Have a great day :)
~Teacher Aki :)
My best trip was jeju with my best friend!
>>> My best trip was in Jeju with my bestfriend!
The weather was bad and we didn¡¯t have a car either. It was hard but that hard things made us more fun. Also the food i ate in jeju, was so good
>>>  The weather was bad and we didn¡¯t have a car either. It was hard but that hard things made us have more fun. Also, the food I ate in Jeju was so good.
My worst trip was in vietnam. When i took off the plane, hothothot air came to me and i was shoked. I walk to temple in very humid and hot weather.
>>> My worst trip was in Vietnam. When I took off the plane, hot air came to meet me and I was shocked. I walked to a  temple in very humid and hot weather.
>>> My trip to Vietnam was the worst. Upon getting off the plane, the hot air came to meet me and I was shocked.  I walked to a  temple in very humid and hot weather.
 Me and my family was all got sweated and irritated. Beach and swiming pool was so fun but i hate that weather. So my worst trip was vietnam with family!
>>> My family and I were all got sweated and irritated. Swimming at the beach and in the pool was so fun but I hate the weather. So my worst trip was to Vietnam with my family.
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