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Q:What do you think about the police in your country? Do you trust them?
A:I don't know about the police in our country, but I think I trust them.
I think if there are no police in our country, then I think more crime will be in our country.
Because, even if the police don't works, criminals can't know anything about the police, so they will be careful about the police.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I don't know about the police in our country, but I think I trust them.

>> I don't know much about the police in our country, but I think I trust them.
I think if there are no police in our country, then I think more crime will be in our country.

>> I think if there are no police officers in our country, then I think there will be more crime in our country.
Because, even if the police don't works, criminals can't know anything about the police, so they will be careful about the police.

>> Even if the police don't work, criminals can't know everything about the police, so they will be careful.

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