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What are the good things and bad things about living in South Korea?

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Coin karaokes are the advantage about living in South Korea. Because it make we can sing when we want to sing whenever. And it is cheap. The bad thing is we must have so many attentions. I don¡¯t know why people intervene other¡¯s job, but they do.

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Hi Yun! ^^

South Korea is such a good place. There are many beautiful sceneries there. Most of my students usually tell me how great living there is. I wish to visit there in the future.  Thanks for sharing. :) 

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Coin karaokes are the advantage about living in South Korea. 
>> Coin Karakokes are one of the great advantages in living in South Korea. 

Because it make we can sing when we want to sing whenever. 
>> We can sing whenever we want to. 

And it is cheap. 
>> It is also cheap. 

The bad thing is we must have so many attentions. 
>> One of the bad things is that people interfere with you all the time. 

I don¡¯t know why people intervene other¡¯s job, but they do.
>> I don¡¯t know why people intervene with other¡¯s job, but they still do.

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