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What are the good things and bad things about living in South Korea?

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There are a lot of adventages and disadventages of living in South Korea.
For instance, in Korea, we can get a lot of benefits about medical so it is one of the adventages.
And for another instance, almost of Korea is city so You can get the things that you want very easily.
Also in Korea, we can't use any weapons so we can be safe of the weapons.
But Korea getting aging and we also having low birth rate.
So I think there are a lot of adventages and disadventages of living in South Korea.

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Hi John! ^^

South Korea is such a good place. There are many beautiful sceneries there. Most of my students usually tell me how great living there is. I wish to visit there in the future.  Although like any other country, it also has some disadvantages. I think there is no country that is perfect anyway.  Thanks for sharing. :) 

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There are a lot of adventages and disadventages of living in South Korea.
>> There are a lot of advantages and disadvantages in living in South Korea. 

For instance, in Korea, we can get a lot of benefits about medical so it is one of the adventages.
>> For instance, in Korea, we have a lot of medical benefits. That's one of the advantages. 

And for another instance, almost of Korea is city so You can get the things that you want very easily.
>> Another advantage is that you can get things here easily so it's convenient. 

Also in Korea, we can't use any weapons so we can be safe of the weapons.
>> Using deadly weapons is also not allowed here so safety is ensured. 

But Korea getting aging and we also having low birth rate.
>> Although one of the disadvantages is that our country's population has a low birth rate. 

So I think there are a lot of adventages and disadventages of living in South Korea.
>> So I think there are a lot of advantages and disadvantages of living in South Korea. 
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