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1. The good things about living in South Korea are like below.
South Korea is safer than other countries because we can't carry guns.
And I don't have to worry about Language. I can use Korean only.
The public transportation is convenient. I can use a bus, a subway, a train and a plain easily.

2. The bad things are about living in South Korea are like below.
The price is too high.
And the competition to get into a good university is too fierce.
The house is too expensive.

P.S. My husband was in a motorcycle accident.
He was a group tour at that time.
The driver in front of him suddenly fell.
And my husband turned and hit the center line guardrail.
In an accident, he injured his cervical spine and he is partially able to use his arms and legs.

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Hi Soo Mi! ^^

South Korea is such a good place. There are many beautiful sceneries there. Most of my students usually tell me how great living there is. I wish to visit there in the future.  Although like any other country, it also has some disadvantages. I think there is no country that is perfect anyway.  Thanks for sharing. :) 

PS: That's a very heartbreaking story. :( but still, your husband is very lucky to have you as his wife because you are so loving and caring. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The good things about living in South Korea are like below.
>> The good things about living in South Korea are below. 

South Korea is safer than other countries because we can't carry guns.
>> CORRECT

And I don't have to worry about Language. I can use Korean only.
>> And I don't have to worry about language because I can use Korean only.

The public transportation is convenient.
>> CORRECT

 I can use a bus, a subway, a train and a plain easily.
>> 
 I can use a bus, a subway, a train and a plane easily.

2. The bad things are about living in South Korea are like below.
>> The bad things are about living in South Korea are below.

The price is too high.
>> The cost of living is too high. 

And the competition to get into a good university is too fierce.
>> CORRECT

The house is too expensive.
>> Houses here are also too expensive. 


P.S. My husband was in a motorcycle accident.
>> CORRECT

He was a group tour at that time.
>> He was in a group tour at that time.

The driver in front of him suddenly fell.
>> CORRECT

And my husband turned and hit the center line guardrail.
>> My husband turned and hit the center line guardrail.

In an accident, he injured his cervical spine and he is partially able to use his arms and legs.
>> In that accident, he injured his cervical spine and he is partially unable to use his arms and legs.

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