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Q:Most people say the book is better than the movie. Is this true for you?
A:I think it is true for me.
Actually, movie has video and audio so most of people think that movie is better but if people watch movie for long time, then their eyes can be not good and it can be more like real so it can make people change, but even if people read books, their eyes are the same and most of books don't make people change.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think it is true for me.

>> CORRECT!
Actually, movie has video and audio so most of people think that movie is better 

>> Actually, a movie has a video and audio so most people think that a movie is better.

but if people watch movie for long time, then their eyes can be not good and it can be more like real so it can make people change, 

>> But if people watch a movie for a long time, then it won't be good for their eyes and the movie can be realistic so it can make people change, 

but even if people read books, their eyes are the same and most of books don't make people change.

>> If people read books, their eyes will stay in the same condition and most books will not make people change.

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