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What do you think is going to happen in your life next year?

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Actually, I don't know about my life nest year because I'm not a person like Dr. Strange.
I forget a lot of memories of my life and I don't know about my future.
But during my life, I relized that knowing the preciousness of living is very important in my life.
If I know the preciousness of living, I can think my life more happier and more valuable than before.
Altough I don't know about my future, but I believe that I will keep the preciousness of my life.
And I think I will be reminded the presiousness of my life by the small happiness hiding in my life and this world.

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Hi John! ^^
 
You actually made me laugh with the Dr. Strange part. Hahaha! But your answer is true. We should value our life and live it to the fullest. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Actually, I don't know about my life nest year because I'm not a person like Dr. Strange.

>> Actually, I don't know what will happen in my life next year because I am not like Dr. Strange. 


I forget a lot of memories of my life and I don't know about my future.

>> I forget a lot of memories in my life and I don't know about my future.


But during my life, I relized that knowing the preciousness of living is very important in my life.

>> But I realized that valuing life is very important for us. 


If I know the preciousness of living, I can think my life more happier and more valuable than before.

>> If I know how precious living is, I can be happier and value life more than before. 


Altough I don't know about my future, but I believe that I will keep the preciousness of my life.

>> Although I don't know about my future, I believe that I will value my life. 


And I think I will be reminded the presiousness of my life by the small happiness hiding in my life and this world.

>> I should always remind myself how precious my life is. Happiness can be found even in the slightest thing in the world. 

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