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We have great imagination and a lot of knowledge, so we can be great people or famous people who can do wonderful things.
Likewise, we can be unhappy with the many knowledge we have accumulated so far.
I think it's important how we use what we have.
When used for justice, those will become precious and better.

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Hi Eun Ha!
This is outstanding!
Your thoughts are well-written
You chose your words carefully.
Congratulations!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
We have great imagination and a lot of knowledge, so we can be great people or famous people who can do wonderful things.
>> Correct
Likewise, we can be unhappy with the many knowledge we have accumulated so far.
>> Likewise, we can be unhappy with a lot of knowledge we have accumulated so far.
I think it's important how we use what we have.
>> Correct
When used for justice, those will become precious and better.
>> When used for justice, those will become more precious and better.
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