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Q:Is it possible to know the future?
A:Actually it's possible to know the future, but many people disagree with this.
Many people think it's impossible to know the future because we choose the future, but the future is decided.
The future is decided, because people are living in third dimension and in fourth dimension there are all the time in earth or our space, so if the science improves, then people can be possible to know the future.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Actually it's possible to know the future, but many people disagree with this.

>> CORRECT!
Many people think it's impossible to know the future because we choose the future, but the future is decided.

>> Many people think it's impossible to know the future because we choose the future, but the future is already decided.
The future is decided, because people are living in third dimension and in fourth dimension there are all the time in earth or our space, so if the science improves, then people can be possible to know the future.

>> The future is decided because people are living in the third and fourth dimension, all the time in earth or space is there, so if science improves then people can know the future.

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