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Who do you think was the best president of South Korea and why?

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In my opinion, Moo-hyun Roh, the sixteenth president of South Korea, was the best president in my country, South Korea.
I think his efforts are very great because he didn't graduated any universities, but he was lawyer and elected to president.
He thought justice is very important thing and he looked everything fairly.
Nowadays, in South Korea, a lot of politicians fight together, even tough they speak badthings about other people.
But Moo-hyun Roh didn't do that like other politicians, he just did a lot of great jobs.
That's why I think Moo-hyun Roh, the sixteenth president of South Korea, was the best president in my country, South Korea.

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Hi John! ^^

Most people usually have different opinion regarding this topic. Every president is different in their own ways. All of them have different advocacies. There is also no president that is perfect. Thanks for sharing your opinion. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my opinion, Moo-hyun Roh, the sixteenth president of South Korea, was the best president in my country, South Korea.
>>In my opinion, Moo-hyun Roh, the sixteenth president of South Korea, was the best president of South Korea. 

I think his efforts are very great because he didn't graduated any universities, but he was lawyer and elected to president.
>> I think his efforts are great because despite not graduating in any univeristy, he still managed to become a lawyer and be elected as president.

He thought justice is very important thing and he looked everything fairly.
>> He thought justice is very important and he looked at everything fairly.

Nowadays, in South Korea, a lot of politicians fight together, even tough they speak badthings about other people.
>> Nowadays in South Korea, a lot of politicians work together even thought they speak badly to other people. 

But Moo-hyun Roh didn't do that like other politicians, he just did a lot of great jobs.
>>But Moo-hyun Roh didn't do that like other politicians. He just did a lot of great work.

That's why I think Moo-hyun Roh, the sixteenth president of South Korea, was the best president in my country, South Korea.
>> That's why I think Moo-hyun Roh, the sixteenth president of South Korea, was the best president of South Korea. 
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