¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Air Polution

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Â÷*ºó
2021-09-01 248

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Theme: [ESSAY] What's your thought on air pollution?
I think people have to take care of air and notice about air pollution.
People have to notice the sky color and their daughter and son's generations.
People have to became using electric cars and electric products.
People have to take care of air and sky!

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Here's your second corrected homework this week, Clair!
Also, just to remind you once more, if it's possible to start the class early at our next session so we can make up for the lost time today. See you then! 

Cheers,
Jean~~


                                     Theme: [ESSAY] What's your thought on air pollution?


I think people have to take care of air and notice about air pollution.
>> I believe people have to take care of the air and be more conscious about air pollution.

People have to notice the sky color and their daughter and son's generations.
>> People have to pay attention to the sky color and their daughter and son's generations.

People have to became using electric cars and electric products.
>> People have to adapt to electric cars and other electric products.

People have to take care of air and sky!
>> People have to take care of the air and the sky!

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
111083 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 0
111082 Homework °­*¼± ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 224
111081 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 1
111080 If you moved to another country, what things would you miss... ·ù*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 272
111079 Page 48 and 53 ¿À*Àº ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 247
111078 Friday homeowrk ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 351
111077 Homework {08/20} Â÷*ºó ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 230
111076 Who is taller? ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 177
111075 Homework ÀÓ*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 3
111074 Homework📓 ¹Ú*¸® ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 484
111073 In your opinion, what are the pros and cons of studying at home? ±è*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 219
111072 Do you compare prices at different stores when you shop? ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 1
111071 Homework Àå*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 168
111070 Don\'t Sleep with Your Phone À¯*Áø ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 1
111069 e-mail correction ¹Ú*±¤ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 2
111068 The way to the dangerous airport, the last exit out of Afghan. È«*Çý ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 7
111067 Homework ±è*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 225
111066 Homework À±*ÀÓ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 162
111065 How does fashion affect people¡¯s lives ±è*Àº ¿Ï·á 2021-08-20 226
111064 Why do you think people dream when they sleep? ÀÌ*¶÷ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-19 5

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04