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Who do you think was the best president of South Korea and why?

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I think the best president of South Korea was Lee seung man. Because he was the first president is Korea. So he have power and he influence good effect to people who want independent.

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Hi Yun! ^^

Most people usually have different opinion regarding this topic. Every president is different in their own ways. All of them have different advocacies. There is also no president that is perfect. Thanks for sharing your opinion. 

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I think the best president of South Korea was Lee seung man. 
>> I think the best president of South Korea was Lee Seung Man. 

Because he was the first president is Korea.
>> He was the first president of South Korea. 

 So he have power and he influence good effect to people who want independent.
>> He had the power to be a good influence to the people who want to be independent. 
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