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What do you think is the hardest job in the world and why?

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I don't know well. Because I think there is no easy job in the world. In my opinion, they are just different way of working.

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Hi Seong! ^^

I think all jobs are hard in their own way. Every person exerts a lot of effort into their expertise. Thanks for sharing your answer. 

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I don't know well. Because I think there is no easy job in the world. 
>> I don't know well because I think there is no easy job in the world. 

In my opinion, they are just different way of working.
>> In my opinion, they are just different in ways of working.

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