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Who do you think was the best president of South Korea and why?

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Who do you think was the best president of South Korea and why?

I don't trust politicians.
That's why I don't have the best president of South Korea.
But, they have a good and bad point.
Some Presidents implemented a good policy during the their term of office.
Our life has improved a good policy.

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Hi Monica! ^^

Most people usually have different opinion regarding this topic. Every president is different in their own ways. All of them have different advocacies. There is also no president that is perfect. Thanks for sharing your opinion. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't trust politicians.
>> CORRECT

That's why I don't have the best president of South Korea.
>> That's why I don't think there is any best president in South Korea.

But, they have a good and bad point.
>> Most of them have good and bad points. 

Some Presidents implemented a good policy during the their term of office.
>> Some Presidents implemented good policies  during the their term. 

Our life has improved a good policy.
>> Our lives have improved because of these. 
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