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Homework: What do you think is the hardest job in the world and why?

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In the current situation where there are many confirmed cases, working in the medical staff or the administration is likely to be the hardest. It will be harder because you don't know when the coronavirus will end, and harder because you hear the treatment, complaints, and complaints of confirmed patients.

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Hi Min Seo! ^^

I think all jobs are hard in their own way. Every person exerts a lot of effort into their expertise. Thanks for sharing your answer. 

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In the current situation where there are many confirmed cases, working in the medical staff or the administration is likely to be the hardest. 
>> In the current situation, where there are many confirmed cases, working as a medical staff or being part of the administration is likely to be the hardest. 

It will be harder because you don't know when the coronavirus will end, and harder because you hear the treatment, complaints, and complaints of confirmed patients.
>> It will be harder because they  don't know when the pandemic will end. It is harder because you hear complaints by patients and other citizens. 
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