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What health problems can some gadgets cause?

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I think the worst problem is not to sleep at night because of gadgets especially cell phone. Due to the electromagnetic waves people cannot sleep well at night and hard to get up early. I think it interferes our daily lives and people would live harder than when they do not use their cell phones before they sleep. It has impact on body because they cannot sleep well and take a rest. I think gadgets affect health of people as much as they guess.

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Hi there, Ria!

Thank you for answering your homework.  This is a good way to help you improve your English skills.  I hope to see again soon.  ^^


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I think the worst problem is not to sleep at night because of gadgets especially cell phone.

>>I think the worst problem is not sleeping at night because of gadgets especially the use of cellphones.

Due to the electromagnetic waves people cannot sleep well at night and hard to get up early.

>>Due to the electromagnetic waves, people cannot sleep well at night and hardly get up early in the morning.

I think it interferes our daily lives and people would live harder than when they do not use their cell phones before they sleep.

>>Correct.

It has impact on body because they cannot sleep well and take a rest.

>>It has an impact on the body because people cannot sleep soundly and take a rest comfortably.

I think gadgets affect health of people as much as they guess.

>>I think gadgets affect the health of people as much as they do.

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