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Nowadays, computers are vital to modern peoples\' life

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Nowadays, computers are vital to modern people. People do their homework, reports, and work in their office by the computers. So I think computers are very important, even vital to modern people. I'll cite two reasons why the computers are vital.
First, people depends on their computers too much to do their homework or work. Even there is online class to study. So if there are not computers, there will be serious confusion to all over the world.
Second, we are in the digital age, computers are vital to our lives. Computers are same with AI. World is entering to AI age so people have no choice without using computers to make some programs.
(P.S. please search YIRUMA's songs in the Youtube! It's very great!)

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Nowadays, computers are vital to modern people.
>>Nowadays, computers are vital for modern people.

People do their homework, reports, and work in their office by the computers.
>> People do their homework, reports and work with computers.

So I think computers are very important, even vital to modern people. 
>> So I think computers are very important for modern people.

I'll cite two reasons why the computers are vital.
>> This is a good sentence. 

First, people depends on their computers too much to do their homework or work. 
>> First, people depend too much on their computers to do their homework or work. 

Even there is online class to study. 
>> There are even online classes.  

So if there are not computers, there will be serious confusion to all over the world.
>> So if there weren't computers, there would be a serious problem all over the world.

Second, we are in the digital age, computers are vital to our lives.
>> Second, we are in the digital age, so computers are vital for our lives.

Computers are same with AI. 
>> Computers are the same with AI.

World is entering to AI age so people have no choice without using computers to make some programs.
>> The world is entering the age of AI, so people have no choice but to use computers to make some programs.


(P.S. please search YIRUMA's songs in the Youtube! It's very great!)
- I looked for Yiruma on YouTube, and now I'm listening to River Flows in You while writing this note for you. 
I like it. It's very relaxing. Thank you for introducing me to his music, Daniel. 
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