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Foreigners who are illegally staying in Korea have to be called for inoculation by government.

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Pandemic is quite serious all over the world, so we need to take measures to prevent virus from spreading. For now what we can do best for that is to get vaccinated without any exception. That's why government pushes every one to get vaccinated as soon as possible including foreigners who are staying legally or illegally. Government will not deport anyone after finding someone illegally staying here. If they are afraid of revealing their position, they can reserve a vaccine shot by proxy. Those foreigners are also careful for virus by themselves because they are not traced by our government easily to confirm whether they follow government guidelines well. Virus never check whether this person is Korean ore not before coming to the person, that is no exception for precaution. Lots of variants is coming on and on, so pandemic seems not to end forever. However we need to do what we can do to fight against virus as our ancestors did so in the past.

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Hello,
Thank you for sharing your ideas!
Please keep up the good job!
Have a nice and safe day.
Teacher ELLY.
Foreigners who are illegally staying in Korea have to be called for inoculation by government.
>>Foreigners, who are illegally staying in Korea, have been summoned for inoculation by the government.
Pandemic is quite serious all over the world, so we need to take measures to prevent virus from spreading. 
>>The pandemic is in a quite serious condition all over the world, so we need to take measures in order to prevent the virus from spreading. 
For now what we can do best for that is to get vaccinated without any exception. 
>>For now, the best we can do is to get vaccinated without any exemptions. 
That's why government pushes every one to get vaccinated as soon as possible including foreigners who are staying legally or illegally. 
>>That's why the government pushes every one to get vaccinated as soon as possible, including the foreigners who are both staying legally or illegally. 
Government will not deport anyone after finding someone illegally staying here. 
>>The government will not deport anyone even after they are found out to be illegally staying here. 
If they are afraid of revealing their position, they can reserve a vaccine shot by proxy. 
>>If they are afraid of revealing their position, they can reserve a vaccine shot by proxy. 
or>>If they are afraid of revealing their real status, they can reserve a vaccine shot by proxy. 
Those foreigners are also careful for virus by themselves because they are not traced by our government easily to confirm whether they follow government guidelines well. 
>>These foreigners are also careful from catching the virus because it means that they will not be traced by our government so easily if they need to confirm whether they are following the government guidelines carefully. 
Virus never check whether this person is Korean ore not before coming to the person, that is no exception for precaution. 
>>If a person is checked for a virus, they are never forced to reveal themselves whether they are Korean or not if they come for vaccination. It is the same when they are doing a precautionary measure, there is no exception. 
Lots of variants is coming on and on, so pandemic seems not to end forever. 
>>Lots of variants are developing left and right, so the pandemic seems to be never ending and is going to be forever. 
However we need to do what we can do to fight against virus as our ancestors did so in the past.
>>However, we need to do whatever we can to fight against the virus, as our ancestors did so in the past.
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