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Should there be strong punishment against racism?

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Thank you for this Junnie. Very well said.



I don¡¯t think that there should be any punishment against racism because racism is basically one kind of perception that people believe. 

>>>  correct  

We haven¡¯t punished any person because of their ideology or perspective. 

>>>  correct  

To be honest, I think we have to admit some sort of feeling of alienation as a minority. 

>>> correct

>>> OR: To be honest, I think we have to acknowledge that there is a sense of alienation towards the minority.    

It is natural that the majorities build their own society suited their own palate and the minorities feel excluded by the society.

>>> It is natural that the majorities would build their own society suited for their own palate and the minorities feel excluded in that society.   

However, there are two points that I want to emphasize: strong punishment against racism and education on the racism to change those perspectives. 

>>> correct 

Deciding the scale of punishment against racism is not focused on racism but on punishment against explicit violence. 

>>>  correct  

It¡¯s because we can¡¯t judge personal thoughts on race in a law. 

>>>  ORIt¡¯s because we can¡¯t judge personal thoughts on race by law.    

But, at least, we should make a judgement considering their based intention towards other races like the cases when other crimes are judged by criminals¡¯ intention.

>>> OR: But, at least, we should make a judgement considering their motives towards other races like the cases when other crimes are judged by criminals¡¯ intention.   

Furthermore, here is the point. We are in a culture cultivated for a long history and we have been educated so far. 

>>> correct    

>>>  My point is, we are in a culture cultivated throughout a long history and we have been educated so far.    

And as we follow the society¡¯s rules, we can keep the idea that the discrimination is wrong and that the violence is not a solution for their social and personal problem. 

>>>  correct  

>> OR: And as we follow the society¡¯s rules, we can keep the idea that discrimination is wrong and that violence is not a solution for their social and personal problem. 

The insists on racism can be depleted gradually with appropriate education and with subtle gentleness to the minorities. 

>>> The insistence on racism can be depleted gradually with appropriate education and with subtle gentleness to the minorities.   

Then the education will be the key to change.

>>>  correct  


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