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Have you been a racist in one way or another? Share your answer in a few sentences.

작성자: 정*우
2021-09-07 301

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Hi there Vicky!


Whether we admit it or not, we have been racists in our little or big ways. From comparing our own skin color to another race, the idea that the West is more superior than the East, drawing an imaginary line or walls for borders of division from a country to another, etc., we have consciously and unconsciously been a racist. However, we can educate ourselves and raise awareness that these can be minimized when we can be more tolerable of each other.


It is more peaceful to underscore similarities than point out differences. 


Thank you for this critical viewpoint, Vicky, I appreciate it always.


-T. Donna =)


It is hard to perfectly accept foreigners as same as my local population. Although there are increasing numbers of people from overseas into our country nowadays, Korea is not originally ethinically diverse country. 

>> It is hard to perfectly accept foreigners the same as my local population. Although there are increasing numbers of people from overseas into our country nowadays, Korea is not originally an ethnically diverse country. 


I also do not have enough experiences to live with foreigners. I only met them for a short time and have a limited relationship. Therefore, I may have some prejudices regarding to them, which make me somewhat a racist. 

>> Correct!

Or: ...regarding them...


For example, I have prejudices to Chinese that they are noisy and they are not well-mannered. Because when I toured Vietnam and met Chinese tourists, they cut in the line shamelessly and speak really loudly. 

>> Correct!


I know that I have not met a lot of Chinese people, so it is not reasonable to think all Chinese as unmannered people, but I had bad first impression to them, which make me hold the prejudices.

>> I know that I have not met a lot of Chinese people, so it is not reasonable to think that all Chinese as unmannered people, but I had a bad first impression of them, which makes me hold these prejudices.


Moreover, I also have another example that I break away from the prejudices regarding to Indian, after I lived in India for 3 weeks and met a lot of Indian people.

>> Moreover, I also have another example that breaks away from the prejudices regarding Indians after I lived in India for 3 weeks and met a lot of Indian people.

 

Before I met them, I thought that Indians are dangerous and weird because they still have caste system and Hinduism, which are all unfamiliar to me. But after I met them and have some time with them, I felt that they are genuine and kind people. 

>> Correct!


Like those, I have had prejudices to foreigners, so I admit that I somewhat have been a racist.

>> Correct!

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