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Who, besides your parents, had the biggest impact on your childhood?

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I think my brother gave me the biggest impact on my chilhood besides my parents.
I was able to grow my social ability more faster and I think I had a lot of great time with my brother.
I learned how to thank to other people and how to apolosize to other people.
That's why I think my brother gave me the biggest impact on my chilhood besides my parents.

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Hi John! ^^
 
There are certain people in our lives that has made a great impact in our lives. Most of them come from our childhood. We wouldn't be who we are today without their help. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think my brother gave me the biggest impact on my chilhood besides my parents.
>>I think my brother has the biggest impact on my childhood besides my parents.

I was able to grow my social ability more faster and I think I had a lot of great time with my brother.
>> I was able to grow my social skills faster and I think I had a lot of great time with my brother.

I learned how to thank to other people and how to apolosize to other people.
>> I learned how to thank other people and how to apologize as well. 

That's why I think my brother gave me the biggest impact on my chilhood besides my parents.
>> That's why I think my brother had the biggest impact on my childhood besides my parents.

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