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I noted that you're conscious of putting care into your vocabulary, and frequently go beyond my expectations. Good going!
Cheers,
Jean~~

>> First of all, Your message make me getting better. Because I acturally have dipressed so I need a cheering. Thanks

Homework

Q. Do you think a promotion is always a good thing? Why?
A. I don't think that is always. beause a promotion require a lot of resposbility, and that needs more effort.

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Hi Ho!

I'm glad you can get some sense of comfort from my feedback. Learning a language for someone like you who's extremely busy is not easy and it would take a very long period of time so don't put too much pressure on yourself and don't get stressed out. Just go with the flow and give your best every time you're in class and I'm confident that your English studies will progress well. Believe in yourself!
On a different note, here's your corrected homework and some corrections on your note.

Cheers, 
Jean~~



Q. Do you think a promotion is always a good thing? Why?
A. I don't think that is always. beause a promotion require a lot of resposbility, and that needs more effort.
>>  I don't think that it's always a good thing because a promotion requires a lot of responsibility, and that needs more effort. 


***First of all, Your message make me getting better. Because I acturally have dipressed so I need a cheering. Thanks
>> First of all, your message makes me feel better because I actually feel depressed so I need some cheering up. 

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