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Who, besides your parents, had the biggest impact on your childhood?

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I think it was my friends. Because they made my character and they spent the most time with me. Moreover they shared experience with me.

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Hi Yun! ^^

There are certain people in our lives that has made a great impact in our lives. Most of them come from our childhood. We wouldn't be who we are today without their help. 

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I think it was my friends. Because they made my character and they spent the most time with me. 
>> I think it would be my friends because they made my character and they spent most of their time with me. 

Moreover they shared experience with me.
>> Moreover, they shared experiences with me.

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