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If I will visit your city, what restaurant would you recommend to me and why

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If I will visit your city, what restaurant would you recommend to me and why

If You will visit our city, you have the opportunity to choose from many restaurant.
Because there are many delicious and famous restaurant in our town.
Also, our city has a lot to see.
It is my pride that our city is good to live in.

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If You will visit our city, you have the opportunity to choose from many restaurant.
>>If you will visit our city, you have the opportunity to choose from many restaurant.

Because there are many delicious and famous restaurant in our town.
>> There are many delicious and famous restaurant in our town.

Also, our city has a lot to see.
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It is my pride that our city is good to live in.
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