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I don't have any special plans but I think I will go to my grandparents' houses because it is a holiday.
In Korea, we go to our grand parents houses or meet with our whole families when it is a big holiday.
In the Lunar New year, we get pocket money but in Shu Seok, often we get pocket money too.
So I think I will go to my grandparents' houses and I will get some pocket money.

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Hi John! ^^

That sounds fun. I hope you have a happy holiday. :)

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I don't have any special plans but I think I will go to my grandparents' houses because it is a holiday.
>> CORRECT

In Korea, we go to our grand parents houses or meet with our whole families when it is a big holiday.
>> 
In Korea, we go to our grandparent's houses or meet with our entire family during special holidays. 

In the Lunar New year, we get pocket money but in Shu Seok, often we get pocket money too.
>> During Lunar New Year and Chu Seok, we receive some pocket money from relatives. 

So I think I will go to my grandparents' houses and I will get some pocket money.
>> CORRECT
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