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When I want to play something for fun, I usually play games. I think when I play game, the time passes so quickly. It can be negative effects like I can spend so much time on it. But it's good to kill time. Then I'll cite two reasons why the game is very fun. (game:Battle ground)
First, I can be nervous because the enemies, so the time passes very quickly. Nerve when I publish is different from nerve in this game. Sometimes nerve makes me feel time passes quickly, sometimes slowly.
Second, i have to focus on this game always. When I'm paying attention to something, i feel the time is passing quickly. However, because of this reason, I have to look at phone lots of time so my eyesight will be worse.

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When I want to play something for fun, I usually play games.
>> When  I want to do something fun, I usually play games.

I think when I play game, the time passes so quickly. 
>> I think when I play games, time passes so quickly. 

It can be negative effects like I can spend so much time on it. 
>> It can be bad because I spend so much time on it.

But it's good to kill time.
>> However, it's good to kill time. 

 Then I'll cite two reasons why the game is very fun. (game:Battle ground)
>> I'll cite two reasons why Battle Ground is very fun.

First, I can be nervous because the enemies, so the time passes very quickly.
>> First, it makes me nervous because of the enemies, so time passes very quickly.

Nerve when I publish is different from nerve in this game. 
>> Nerve is different from this game.

Sometimes nerve makes me feel time passes quickly, sometimes slowly.
>> Sometimes Nerve makes me feel that time passes quickly but sometimes slowly.

Second, i have to focus on this game always. 
>> Second, I always have to focus on this game.

When I'm paying attention to something, i feel the time is passing quickly. 
>> When I'm paying attention to something, I feel time is passing quickly. 

However, because of this reason, I have to look at phone lots of time so my eyesight will be worse.
>> However, because of these reasons, I have to use my phone for a long time so my eyesight could become worse.

Great job, Daniel! It's good to know that you know what will happen if you keep on using your cell phone for hours.  Try to set an alarm so that you can control how much time you're spending on your cell phone. 
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