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What is one cosmetic you cannot live without??

--> I have an special experience about cosmetic. When I was teenager, my parent manage their own store. The items of the store was cosmetics!! That is why I have been interested in cosmetic since I was young. After all, I became a worker for cosmetic company. Isn't it funny? I think that it is very fascinating. Anyways, back to your question, I think that all kinds of cosmetic are very important for me. The most important one is sunscreen cream, the second ranking one is lipstick. It seems that protecting our skin is very important function, and the reason why lipstick is important for me is because the color of my lip is very pale. If I do not wear lipstick, other people think that I am sick.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Bo Im!

A lady needs a cosmetics with her one way or another. It is so necessary nowadays. Even if COVID-19 makes us wear a face mask all the time, we still need to do some effort to be beautiful because there is an external pressure to be beautiful specially professionally.

So, thank you for wearing some make up sometimes and even if you don't at times, you are still stunning!

Thanks for this answer. 

-T. Donna =)

I have an special experience about cosmetic. When I was teenager, my parent manage their own store. 
>> I have a special experience about cosmetics. When I was a teenager, my parents manage their own store. 

The items of the store was cosmetics!! That is why I have been interested in cosmetic since I was young. 
>> Correct!
Or: The items of the store was cosmetics! That is why I have been interested in cosmetics since I was young. 

After all, I became a worker for cosmetic company. Isn't it funny? I think that it is very fascinating. 
>> Correct!
Or: After all, I became a worker for a cosmetic company. Isn't it funny? I think that it is very fascinating. 

Anyways, back to your question, I think that all kinds of cosmetic are very important for me. 
>> Correct!
Or: cosmetics

The most important one is sunscreen cream, the second ranking one is lipstick. 
>> The most important one is the sunscreen cream, the second in rank is the lipstick. 

It seems that protecting our skin is very important function, and the reason why lipstick is important for me is because the color of my lip is very pale. 
>> It seems that protecting our skin is a very important function, and the reason why lipstick is important for me is because the color of my lips is very pale. 

If I do not wear lipstick, other people think that I am sick.
>> Correct!
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