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When I heard the news of Afghanistan women, I reminded of the premodern society.

Their life havw no hman right itself.

Korea also does not a long history that women got educated.

The history of women's education is about 100 years.

I think that that uneducated women cannot help living like salves by oppressive men.

Muslim men are very inhuman, in terms of attitude and philosophies toward women in the name of religion.

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Good day, Ms. Lily! Your thoughts about this topic is very interesting. Thank you for letting me know your thought as always.
~Aki :)
When I heard the news of Afghanistan women, I reminded of the premodern society.
>>> When I heard the news of  Afghanistan women, I was reminded of the premodern society.
Their life have no human right itself.
>>> Their lives have no human right themselves. 
>>> Basically, they do not have any human rights.
Korea also does not a long history that women got educated.
>>> Korea also does not have a long history for women who got educated.
The history of women's education is about 100 years.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> 100 years ago when the history of Korean women's education started.
I think that that uneducated women cannot help living like salves by oppressive men.
>>>  I think that uneducated women cannot help living like slaves by oppressing men.
Muslim men are very inhuman, in terms of attitude and philosophies toward women in the name of religion.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> In terms of character and philosophies, I think Muslim men are very inhuman towards women in the name of religion.
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