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The hardest part of saving money is .
1. when you want some thig and you don't need it or having no reason to buy the thing exept you want it then you could not buy the thing that you want.

The best part of saving money is..........

1. We can do some thing when you really need money or in a emargancy.


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Good Evening, Yuri~

Thank you so much in answering the questions. I really appreciate that,

Have a great evening!

~T. Roanne ^_^

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The hardest part of saving money is .
1. when you want some thig and you don't need it or having no reason to buy the thing exept you want it then you could not buy the thing that you want.
>> The hardest part of saving money is when you want something, but you don't really need or you don't have any reason to buy it. 

The best part of saving money is..........

1. We can do some thing when you really need money or in a emargancy.
>> The best part of saving money is we can do something when we really need money or for an emergency. 
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