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I think it's the good heart of Koreans to make people beautiful in Korea.
The reason is that even if people put things in the library or cafe no one takes them.
And people can't say that it's not good if you eat food at a restaurant and it's not good. The same goes for me. It's so frustrating.

What about your country?

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Hello Jenny!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think it's the good heart of Koreans to make people beautiful in Korea.

>> I think it's the good heart of Koreans that make people beautiful in Korea.
The reason is that even if people put things in the library or cafe no one takes them.

>> The reason is that even if people leave things in a library or cafe, no one takes them.
And people can't say that it's not good if you eat food at a restaurant and it's not good. 

>> People can't say that it's not good if you eat food at a particular restaurant. 

The same goes for me.

>> CORRECT!

 It's so frustrating.

>> CORRECT!

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