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The most important appointment I have is psychological counseling because it takes time to forget about what happened to me almost two weeks ago. Also, counseling teacher will help me prepare for a new life without my brother.

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Hello Judy!

It's great to see you back here on the composition page. Mourning takes time and counseling is a very helpful way to talk about how you feel. How people feel is so important because as human beings, it is our characteristic to try to understand what is happening around us and how to respond to it.

With the untimely demise of your brother, I hope that you will religiously attend your counseling and in the end, find comfort in the process of you and your family's healing. I am always ready to listen to you when you have something to say. 

Thank you for this answer. See you later in class. ^^

-T. Donna =)

The most important appointment I have is psychological counseling because it takes time to forget about what happened to me almost two weeks ago. 
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Or: The most important appointment I have is the psychological counseling because it takes time to forget about what happened to me almost two weeks ago. 

Also, counseling teacher will help me prepare for a new life without my brother.
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