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The reason that our family is very important.

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Family is one of the essential things in our life. Family is the only person we can trust and rely on when we are having a hard time. Even if there are more than 10 members of a family, if at least one of them is suffering and sad, the family is the one who suffers and grieves together with one heart and one mind. "Family" means "one people living in one house with one meaning". They empathize with each other, they know me better than anyone else, and therefore they can rely on and trust each other more. For this reason, I can say that family is very important.

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Hi there, Maria! ^_^

I totally agree with you in this composition.
No one and nothing in this world can ever replace our family, so we have to show them how much we love and cherish them, okay?
We can talk about this in class if ever you have some questions. See you later!^^

__T. Mayleen :)


Family is one of the essential things in our life.
>>> CORRECT
Family is the only person we can trust and rely on when we are having a hard time.
>>> We can trust and rely on our family when we are having a hard time.
Even if there are more than 10 members of a family, if at least one of them is suffering and sad, the family is the one who suffers and grieves together with one heart and one mind.
>>> Even if there are more than 10 members in a family, if at least one of them is suffering and feeling sad, the others will also share the pain with one heart and one mind.
"Family" means "one people living in one house with one meaning".
>>> Family means the person or people who care about you.
They empathize with each other, they know me better than anyone else, and therefore they can rely on and trust each other more.
>>> They empathize with each other; they know me better than anyone else; and therefore, they can trust and rely on each other more.
For this reason, I can say that family is very important.
>>> CORRECT
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