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Is there a right time to give up and stop trying? Or should you never give up?

작성자: 류*선
2021-09-14 653

회원님의 영작문

This theme makes me very hard to decide. Because I am a hard worker. So it's hard to give up. Finding the right time to stop is not an easy task for me. But once I have gained awareness of my priorities, I'm confident I'll let go of the problems I've been holding on to. The most important thing is to have awareness of what I need the most. I think that every decision comes with regret and satisfaction.
For example, when my husband is thinking about a decision he made, I always ask him. "If you could go back to that time, what decision would you make?" My husband always gives the same answer. "If I went back, I would have made the same decision again." I told my husband. "You made the best decision. Don't regret it." We don't know the future, but if I'm doing my best in surrounding myself with God now, God will work and help me. When I trust in a God who is greater than the fear of making decisions, we can create the best of our lives. 

Thank you!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

This is so uplifting, Jane! Amen! If God is for us, who can be against us?(Romans 8:31) See you later!-Faith-
This theme makes me very hard to decide. Because I am a hard worker. So it's hard to give up. 
>> This theme makes me very hard to decide because I am a hard worker, so it's hard to give up. 
Finding the right time to stop is not an easy task for me. 
>> CORRECT 
OR Finding the right time to stop is challenging for me. 
But once I have gained awareness of my priorities, I'm confident I'll let go of the problems I've been holding on to. 
>> But once I have gained awareness of my priorities, I'm confident to let go of the problems I've been holding on to. 
The most important thing is to have awareness of what I need the most. 
>> CORRECT
OR I understand the concept of first things first.
I think that every decision comes with regret and satisfaction.
>> CORRECT
For example, when my husband is thinking about a decision he made, I always ask him. "If you could go back to that time, what decision would you make?" 
>> For example, when my husband thinks about the decision he made, I always ask him, "If you could go back to that time, what decision would you make?" 
My husband always gives the same answer. 
>> CORRECT
"If I went back, I would have made the same decision again.
>> "If I could go back in time, I would have made the same decision again."
I told my husband. "You made the best decision. Don't regret it."
>> Then, I told my husband, "You made the best decision. Don't regret it."
We don't know the future, but if I'm doing my best in surrounding myself with God now, God will work and help me. 
>> We don't know the future, but if I'm doing my best by surrounding myself with God now, God will work and help me. 
When I trust in a God who is greater than the fear of making decisions, we can create the best of our lives. 
>> When we trust in a God who is greater than the fear of making decisions, we can create the best of our lives.
Thank you!
>> CORRECT
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