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Q:Please answer in the form of an essay below.
What is the traditional work that Koreans do during Chuseok?

A:Make a rice cake called Songpyeon.

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Hi Daniel! :) 

Koreans celebrate Chu Seok by making special foods, particularly a certain kind of rice cake called songpyeon. Songpyeon is made with finely ground new rice and the dough is kneaded into small round shapes and filled with sesame seeds, chestnuts, red beans, or other similar ingredients.

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Make a rice cake called Songpyeon.
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