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It is very impressed story.

Both of them had good values and personality.

I respect such as a bellboy who loves his job.

He can treat every guests like family because he has pride in his job.

Charles is also respected that he inherits his money to the bellboy.

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Good afternoon Ms. Lily! I would agree with you that this kind of story touches my heart too. Enjoy writing your thoughts :)
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It is very impressed story.
>>> It is a very impressive story.
>>> I was impressed with the story.
Both of them had good values and personality.
>>>  Both of them had good values and personalities.
>>> Both of them possessed good values and personalities.
I respect such as a bellboy who loves his job.
>>> I respect such people who loves his job.
He can treat every guests like family because he has pride in his job.
>>> He can treat every guest like a  family because he has pride in his job.
>>>  He can treat every guest like a  family because he is proud of his job.
Charles is also respected that he inherits his money to the bellboy.
>>> Charles us also respected that he passed his money to the bellboy
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