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Do you think that art is important to society? why?

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I think art is important to society.
First, music is important factor for life.
It can comfort to people or make them relax.
And music has much power than I can expect so it is very essential to society.
Second, paintings also give comfort to people.
We can not only enjoy watching artworks but also drawing or makeing them directly.
It gives vitality to life.
For these reasons, I think art makes lives richer.
So I think art has important meaning in human life.

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Hi Emily, thank you for this. Have a great day!
Jasmin 

I think art is important to society.
>>I think art is important to society. 
First, music is important factor for life.
>>First music is one of the most important things in our lives. 
It can comfort to people or make them relax.
>>It can give comfort and relaxation to people. 
And music has much power than I can expect so it is very essential to society.
>>And music has a big influence to people in our society more than we can imagine.
Second, paintings also give comfort to people.
>>Second is painting, it can also give comfort to people. 
We can not only enjoy watching artworks but also drawing or makeing them directly
>> Aside from admiring the beauty of artworks we can also make our own one. 
It gives vitality to life.
>>Art  gives meaning to our lives.
For these reasons, I think art makes lives richer.
>>I think art can make our lives more meaningful.
So I think art has important meaning in human life.
>>So art is essential to our lives. 
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