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What are the traditional things that Koreans do during Chu Seok?

작성자: 류*주
2021-09-15 709

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Nowadays, almost Koreans don't do any traditional things during Chu Seok or other holidays.
But before, almost Koreans did a lot of traditional things like some games or ancestral rites to ancestors.
Whole family gathered in one house and joined various kinds of games or things.
First, they did ancestral rites to their ancestors and they joinded different kinds of games.
One of the game is yut play and it represent Chu Seok.
But nowadays, people have various kinds of religion and they don't do yut play anymore.
So they don't do ancestral rites and they also don't play yut play.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John! :)

Koreans celebrate Chu Seok by making special foods, particularly a certain kind of rice cake called songpyeon. Songpyeon is made with finely ground new rice and the dough is kneaded into small round shapes and filled with sesame seeds, chestnuts, red beans, or other similar ingredients.

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Nowadays, almost Koreans don't do any traditional things during Chu Seok or other holidays.
>> Nowadays, most Koreans don't do the traditional things anymore during Chu Seok or other holidays.

But before, almost Koreans did a lot of traditional things like some games or ancestral rites to ancestors.
>> But before, most Koreans did a lot of traditional things like playing traditional games or paying ancestral rites to ancestors.

Whole family gathered in one house and joined various kinds of games or things.
>> The whole family gathers in one house and join together to play various kinds of games. 

First, they did ancestral rites to their ancestors and they joinded different kinds of games.
>> First, they do ancestral rites to their ancestors and they join different kinds of games.

One of the game is yut play and it represent Chu Seok.
>> One of the game is "Yut" and it represents Chu Seok.

But nowadays, people have various kinds of religion and they don't do yut play anymore.
>> But nowadays, people have various kinds of religion and they don't do these things anymore. 

So they don't do ancestral rites and they also don't play yut play
>>So they don't do the ancestral rites and they also don't play anymore. 

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