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Which one do you think is better, being a boss or being a leader? Explain your answer.

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I don¡¯t know what is different between a boss and being a leader, because they are the top of a group. But I think a leader is better than a boss. Because the word ¡®leader¡¯ can provide an image of kindness and familiar.

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Hi Yun:)

boss manages their employees, while a leader inspires them to innovate, think creatively, and strive for perfection. Every team has a boss, but what people need is a leader who will help them achieve greatness.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don¡¯t know what is different between a boss and being a leader, because they are the top of a group. 
>> I don¡¯t know what is different between a boss and a leader because they are the top of a group. 

But I think a leader is better than a boss. 
>> CORRECT

Because the word ¡®leader¡¯ can provide an image of kindness and familiar
>> The word "leader" can provide an image of kindness and familiarization. 
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