¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Which one do you think is better, being a boss or being a leader? Explain your answer.

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÇÏ*À±
2021-09-17 342

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I don¡¯t know what is different between a boss and being a leader, because they are the top of a group. But I think a leader is better than a boss. Because the word ¡®leader¡¯ can provide an image of kindness and familiar.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Yun:)

boss manages their employees, while a leader inspires them to innovate, think creatively, and strive for perfection. Every team has a boss, but what people need is a leader who will help them achieve greatness.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don¡¯t know what is different between a boss and being a leader, because they are the top of a group. 
>> I don¡¯t know what is different between a boss and a leader because they are the top of a group. 

But I think a leader is better than a boss. 
>> CORRECT

Because the word ¡®leader¡¯ can provide an image of kindness and familiar
>> The word "leader" can provide an image of kindness and familiarization. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
111370 IELTS writing task1 line graph ½Å*Áø ¿Ï·á 2021-08-30 1
111369 How do you greet someone you just met? ÁÖ*¼® ¿Ï·á 2021-08-30 164
111368 page 13 ¿À*Àº ¿Ï·á 2021-08-29 262
111367 Homework 8.30 Àå*º° ¿Ï·á 2021-08-29 273
111366 What is the most exciting thing you have ever done? ±è*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-29 200
111365 wage ceiling? ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-29 274
111364 9 ä*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-29 258
111363 65 ä*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-29 205
111362 Homework ³²*¸® ¿Ï·á 2021-08-29 208
111361 HOMEWORK: Is it possible to avoid conflicts totally in our life?... ¹Ú*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-29 245
111360 Do you prefer Korean cars or foreign cars? Share your thoughts... ÀÌ*Çö ¿Ï·á 2021-08-28 292
111359 I think expression, and grammar will be better! ±è*¶û ¿Ï·á 2021-08-28 251
111358 DIRECTIONS: Please use the expressions in a sentence: ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-28 1
111357 colonization À±*Áø ¿Ï·á 2021-08-28 3
111356 Please correct it À±*Áø ¿Ï·á 2021-08-28 2
111355 What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of driving... Ȳ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2021-08-28 3
111354 If you can eat one food for the rest of your life, what would it... ¿©*Áø ¿Ï·á 2021-08-28 0
111353 Homework ¹Ú*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-28 261
111352 8.27 homework ÀÓ*À± ¿Ï·á 2021-08-27 1
111351 Did you ever cancel an appointment? Why? Share your answer in a... ÀÌ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2021-08-27 221

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04